Wikipedia:Peer review/Hemostasis/archive1

Hemostasis

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I've listed this article for peer review because a student nominated it for WP:GAN and it is an article worth taking to that, but I'm not equipped to assist the student in adding the volume of sources to get it there. What does it need to get there topically in terms of comprehensiveness? How do the sources work for meeting WP:MEDRS? What are good sources for improving? Is there better organisation?

Thanks, LauraHale (talk) 05:31, 29 April 2012 (UTC)

Comments

• Well, it failed GAN so I guess there's more to be done from that review.
• One para is a little brief, per WP:LEAD.
• Consistency in description, is it "hemostasis" or "haemostasis"?
• "sub- endothelium surface ." why those spaces?
• "History of Artificial Hemostasis" don't over-capitalise headings.
• "332BC " normally add a space before BC.
• Vascular Spasm - first, don't bold it, second, don't overcapitalise it.
• "Vascular Spasm - Damaged blood vessels " that hyphen should be an en-dash per WP:DASH.
• "injured area.[5] [6]" don't put spaces between refs.
• "Types of Hemostasis" see previous comment re:headings.
• Don't have bare URLs in the refs.
• Don't use hyphens for page ranges in the refs (again, see WP:DASH).

The Rambling Man (talk) 17:33, 4 May 2012 (UTC)