Wikipedia:Peer review/Fairy/archive1

Fairy[edit]

What is needed to improve this article? Goldfritha 00:58, 28 January 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Take all articles in 'See also' and mention them in context. Wiki-newbie 14:55, 28 January 2007 (UTC)[reply]

All of them? Err -- why? I could see purging the list, but I don't think all of them suitable in the text. Goldfritha 23:17, 28 January 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Please see automated peer review suggestions here. Thanks, APR _t 15:49, 28 January 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks, looking. Goldfritha 23:17, 28 January 2007 (UTC)[reply]

My 2 cents:
Your lead may be inappropriate in size. Examine WP:LEAD to confirm that it is the right size, please.
"The term "fairy" came into use in the folklore of Western Europe in the medieval era;" Please verify/cite sources here.
"Fairies are generally described as human in appearance, though of variable size, and with magical powers. This is a generalization, please cite sources.
For obscure, occult facts such as the following, please verify and cite sources: "Folklorists have suggested that their actual origin lies in a conquered race living in hiding, or in religious beliefs that lost currency with the advent of Christianity." I apoligize preemptively for any offense taken from me calling the statement occult, but it shocked me as quite bizarre and other viewers will agree.
"Folklorists have suggested that their actual origin lies in a conquered race living in hiding, or in religious beliefs that lost currency with the advent of Christianity." See WP:WTA
"Much of the folklore about fairies revolves about protection from their malice, by such means as cold iron or charms of rowan and herbs, or avoiding offense by shunning locations known to be theirs." Another generalisation, the FAC people will rip your article to shreads over these. Please cite sources. Your opening, "much of the folklore about fairies" is awkward.
" In particular, folklore describes how to prevent the fairies from stealing babies and substituting changelings." This statement infers that all folklore is about fairies that steal babies. I know it doesn't mean that and that the author was intending quite different meaning. That is how it reads, however. Evan^{(Salad dressing is the milk of the infidel!)} 21:34, 29 January 2007 (UTC)[reply]
Comma splice alert! "tales, and continue in modern literature." Remove it (the comma.)

An example about comma usage, as you make the mistake more than once.

INCORRECT: John walked to the store, and bought ice cream.

CORRECT: John walked to the store and bought ice cream.

CORRECT: John walked to the store, and he bought ice cream.

" they originally were of a much different image: tall, angelic beings or short, wizened trolls being some of the commonly mentioned. " Sources-- cite them.

You do very well citing sources below. I couldn't find any mistakes that I hadn't warned you about after, Good luck with your article. Evan^{(Salad dressing is the milk of the infidel!)} 21:34, 29 January 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Thank you, I'm working on these, but I have a few questions.

Do you see anything that can be chopped from the lede without its not summarizing the article?

How do I make it clear that two sentences come from the same source?

What do you mean by "obscure, occult facts"?

I have looked at WP:WTA; I think I need you to tell me which word you are referring to. Goldfritha 02:26, 30 January 2007 (UTC)[reply]

A comment about these comments[edit]

If this article (or any other) has some phrase with an incorrect assemblage (commas in bad place; grammar issues; etc., etc.) then please use your time to fix it. If you realize a problem, doesn’t help to use your time for putting messages that invite others to work in it (it is not useful or polite). Please just do the correction. Do what you can do at that time (even if not to much), others eventually will complete the task.
a reader.