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Star on the Mountain has been listed as one of the Art and architecture good articles under the good article criteria. If you can improve it further, please do so. If it no longer meets these criteria, you can reassess it.
Review: April 17, 2022. (Reviewed version).

A fact from Star on the Mountain appeared on Wikipedia's Main Page in the Did you know column on 19 May 2022 (check views). The text of the entry was as follows:

Did you know... that the El Paso Star on the Mountain (pictured) is lit up every night and visible from the air up to 100 miles (160 km) away?

A record of the entry may be seen at Wikipedia:Recent additions/2022/May. The nomination discussion and review may be seen at Template:Did you know nominations/El Paso Star 2.

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Did you know nomination[edit]

The following is an archived discussion of the DYK nomination of the article below. Please do not modify this page. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page (such as this nomination's talk page, the article's talk page or Wikipedia talk:Did you know), unless there is consensus to re-open the discussion at this page. No further edits should be made to this page.

The result was: promoted by Theleekycauldron (talk) 09:58, 13 May 2022 (UTC)[reply]

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The El Paso Star illuminated at sunset in 2012

... that the El Paso Star (pictured) is lit up every night and visible from the air up to 100 miles (160 km) away? Source: [1][2][3]
- ALT1: ... that the El Paso Star (pictured) has been frequently vandalized throughout its entire existence? Source: [4]
- ALT2: ... that the El Paso Star (pictured) costs about $8 to light per night? Source: [5]
- ALT3: ... that the El Paso Star (pictured) has a length greater than its width to correct distortion when viewed from the ground? Source: https://www.newspapers.com/clip/99778802/epec-to-light-star-friday/
- Comment: Previously nominated, withdrawn then.

Improved to Good Article status by Bsoyka (talk). Self-nominated at 19:46, 17 April 2022 (UTC).[reply]

General: Article is new enough and long enough
New enough: Long enough:

Policy compliance:

Adequate sourcing:
Neutral:
Free of copyright violations, plagiarism, and close paraphrasing: - n

Hook: Hook has been verified by provided inline citation
Cited: Interesting:

Image: Image is freely licensed, used in the article, and clear at 100px.
Freely licensed: Used in article: Clear at 100px:

QPQ: None required.

Overall: There appears to be some close paraphrasing that needs to be reviewed. --evrik ^(talk) 05:00, 18 April 2022 (UTC)[reply]

@Evrik: Fixed that up a little, mostly names and a quote now. Bsoyka (talk) 11:53, 18 April 2022 (UTC)[reply]

comment "prevent distortion" surely it corrects the distortion caused by viewing it from the ground. Victuallers (talk) 13:09, 18 April 2022 (UTC)[reply]
Edited. Bsoyka (talk) 17:20, 18 April 2022 (UTC)[reply]
Approving Alt0 hook. --evrik ^(talk) 20:34, 18 April 2022 (UTC)[reply]

GA review[edit]

This review is transcluded from Talk:El Paso Star/GA1. The edit link for this section can be used to add comments to the review.

Reviewer: Sammi Brie (talk · contribs) 17:10, 10 April 2022 (UTC)[reply]

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)
It is reasonably well written. a (prose, spelling, and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists): It is factually accurate and verifiable. a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR): d (copyvio and plagiarism): It is broad in its coverage. a (major aspects): b (focused): It follows the neutral point of view policy. Fair representation without bias: It is stable. No edit wars, etc.: It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate. a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Overall: Pass/Fail:
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Overall, it's almost there. The first section could use a reflow to make the paragraphs less choppy, and there are two minor comma items, one minor reference item (and a suggestion), and alt text on the image. @Bsoyka: 7-day hold. Sammi Brie (she/her • t • c) 17:30, 10 April 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Copy changes[edit]

holiday season, but - remove comma
Done: Diff. Bsoyka (talk) 19:54, 10 April 2022 (UTC)[reply]
November 29, 1940 at - MOS:DATECOMMA needed
Done: Diff. Bsoyka (talk) 19:54, 10 April 2022 (UTC)[reply]
A lot of choppy one- or two-sentence paragraphs in "20th century" header
Fixed: Combined some of them together, hopefully flows better now. Bsoyka (talk) 02:05, 12 April 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Other[edit]

Add page numbers to newspapers.com refs (this requires looking at the page)
Done: Diff. Bsoyka (talk) 19:54, 10 April 2022 (UTC)[reply]
References are archived.
Note: Archived one more that I must've missed. Bsoyka (talk) 02:05, 12 April 2022 (UTC)[reply]
Since it's been a year and the Herald-Post is now in newspapers.com for the full run, do a search to see if that newspaper has any articles that might be relevant.
Doing...: Definitely a lot to sift through there, working on it. Bsoyka (talk) 02:05, 12 April 2022 (UTC)[reply]
@Sammi Brie: Calling this one Done: I think I've gathered as much as I can from the Herald-Post. Diff. Bsoyka (talk) 17:12, 17 April 2022 (UTC)[reply]
Going to pass for GA. It definitely has a bit more heft with the Herald-Post materials. Sammi Brie (she/her • t • c) 17:26, 17 April 2022 (UTC)[reply]
The lone image is PD, but it does need alt text.
Done: Used A five-pointed star made up of white lights on a mountain during an orange sunset, with a tree silhouette in the foreground. Diff. Bsoyka (talk) 19:54, 10 April 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Review in progress