Talk:Albert Camus/GA1
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Reviewer: Sainsf (talk · contribs) 18:27, 18 April 2020 (UTC)
Appears fairly long but well-written. Sorry it had to wait so long. I will post my comments soon :) Sainsf (talk · contribs) 18:27, 18 April 2020 (UTC)
- General comments
- No copyvio concerns, dablinks or broken external links detected. Only two duplinks (in 'Algeria'): Berbers and Alger républicain
- Sourcing: Looks reliable and sufficient. A few points:
** Doing...Cinadon36 10:55, 21 April 2020 (UTC)Done. I removed a subsection of works published after his death. It seems that these titles didnot receive much attention by other authors.Cinadon36 09:33, 23 April 2020 (UTC)
- I am impressed by the citations. I would suggest adding the '|trans-title=' and '|language=' parameters to foreign language sources. Does the Boulouque, Sylvain (2000) source have no identifier?
Doing.... On Boulouque, the ref was at the article before I got involved and I tried to respect all RS that I found. I do not not know french to double check the source. I just changed the format of the citation. Cinadon36 09:33, 23 April 2020 (UTC) After some consideration and lot of google-search, I removed the specific sentence. It was not of huge significance and I couldn't locate the source.Cinadon36 12:48, 23 April 2020 (UTC) As for the trans titles, I did it for Catelli's book, since I could spot the translated term in an article at The Guardia[2], but I am hesitant doing the same for Albert Camus : l'exigence morale (L'Esprit des Lettres) since that would be OR...Cinadon36 13:24, 23 April 2020 (UTC)
- Comments on prose
Well-written and grammatically accurate on the whole. A few queries and suggestions:
French Algerian philosopher
Why not use a single link to French Algeria?He won the Nobel Prize in Literature at the age of 44 in 1957, the second-youngest recipient in history.
Would be good to mention the first one too
He was in Paris when the Germans invaded France
Maybe provide the year here? Also forDuring the Algerian War
Camus was politically active. He was part of the Left that opposed the Soviet Union because of its totalitarianism
These two lines would look better if combined by a semicolon or an emdash.Spanish-(Balearic) descent
Why the brackets?Hence, he was called pied-noir
Here 'pied-noir' is in italics, but not in the lead. Any one format should be used conysistently.In 1933, he also met Simone Hié
Was she someone he met at college? Any background to that?- I have never come across a section title like 'Young Camus', also it's not so suitable as the previous section also describes most of his teenage (mostly up to 1933).. I wonder if 'Formative years' would look better?
and had not read Das Kapital (Capital)
Sounds a bit like reading this book should commonly precede the generation of communist belief.Because of his tuberculosis, he was forced to move to the French Alps
Not sure why he moved, was it his health? Could be clarified.Lettres à un ami allemand (Letters to a German Friend)
Should the German name also be in title case like the English one?Comité français pour la féderation européenne
Should be in italics and probably title caseThe second was an unfinished novel, Le Premier homme (The First Man)
'H' in homme (There might be other instances)The publication of this book in 1994 has sparked a widespread reconsideration of Camus's allegedly unrepentant colonialism
I don't see why this needs to be a separate paragraph, looks better if merged with the previous one.- 'Algeria' does not sound like a proper section title.. maybe something like 'Role in Algeria' works? Or maybe merge the material from here into previous sections?
- The section is discussing the relation between Algeria and Camus. Maybe "Relation of Camus and Algeria"? Doesnt sound as a perfect title. I will think a little more, and if I do not come up with something else, I will add "Role in Algeria". Or maybe "Camus and Algeria", I have seen it used elsewhere in the literature, but cant remember where... Cinadon36 14:54, 24 April 2020 (UTC)
The rest looks good to me. Thanks for this interesting read :) Sainsf (talk · contribs) 16:55, 20 April 2020 (UTC)
Well then, everything looks great :) Promoted! Sainsf (talk · contribs) 22:04, 24 April 2020 (UTC)
Many thanks Sainsf for taking this GAN. I 'd also like to thank you for your comments and points- the article looks much better now. Cinadon36 08:25, 25 April 2020 (UTC)